I kinda have issues with your licensing.
It says it can't be used without the artists permission for any commercial stuff, yet the song itself isn't yours anyway. Idk...
The song isn't a video game song originally. It's from "The Nightmare Before Christmas" although you're probably thinking of Kingdom Hearts when you say from a video game.
It's pretty cool. I think you did an excellent job.
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